I would give the first student’s essay a letter grade of a C. I would give this student this grade because the introduction does not have a good hook. The conclusion also did not sum up the purpose of the essay. Although they refer to past times a lot it still does not show logical reasoning to why they think this. He refers to the past too much and does not talk about the current situation enough.
I would give the second student’s essay an A. They have a very good hook at the beginning which makes people want to keep reading it. The introduction introduces the main theme of the essay. The writer then waits until the second paragraph to show what the essay is about. The student also sounds very educated about their topic and states why they think what they think. It was a very good essay and that is why I would give it an A.