In the first student’s essay the sentences used in the introduction are hard to understand. The sentences should be rearranged so that it is easier for the reader to comprehend. One of the strong points in the first essay was the paragraph that explains the powerpoint and how it allows the people attending to stay focused on the topic at hand. The first paper is organized in topics such as introduction, Tuesday Knights, GroupMe vs. social media, and then the conclusion. The sources used in the first essay would be Facebook, Powerpoint, GroupMe, Instagram, and Twitter. The second student’s essay was much stronger than the first essay. Although I am not sure you are suppose to incorporate pictures in an essay it did allow the reader the chance to connect more with the reading because there is an example of their source. Overall I didn’t find any weak points in this essay. The paper is organized starting with the introduction, then it is explained how to join the discourse community, then explained the genre of the community, after that they explain how social media helps inform others about their community, and then they conclude the essay. The sources used in the second essay are Instagram, WhatsApp, and FaceBook.
