Essay One: Think Before You Spit
Within this essay, I noticed a few nit-picky things that, if changed, may polish off this work. One thing that I noticed was the presence of unnecessary redundancies in various cases, be they simple repetition of words, or even remark of the same concept more than once. For example (of the latter), “…leading a weekly poetry workshop called Tuesday Knights that takes place on—by no surprise—Tuesdays.” (? 2)is redundant. I understand that the writer probably wrote this in consciousness of style/voice, or maybe even humor, but I would much appreciate a wording that eliminates repitition, such as ‘…leading a weekly poetry workshop, appropriately named Tuesday Knights.’. Similar principles can be applied to the instances of repeated words.
As for the strengths of this essay, there are plenty to be accounted for. I found the most notable to be structure/organization and use of external sources. The essay is organized in a way that walks the reader through the details of its described discourse smoothly, flowing from introduction to explanation to conclusion with ease. In compliment of their statements, the writer integrated five quotes from their four sources comfortably into the essay. The sources they used are as follows: “Navigating Genres.” by Kerry Dirk, taken from Writing Spaces: Reading on Writing Vol.1, an interview of Sean Glatch from the 29th of March 2019, “Discourse Communities and Communities of Practice: Membership, Conflict, and Diversity.” by Ann Johns, and the ‘About’ section of Project SPIT’s Facebook page.
Essay Two: The Puerto Rican Student Association: A Community Identity Analysis
This is a mostly strong essay, given that its few weeknesses were grammar related as opposed to content. One example of the writer’s wording falling short is shown on page six where they wrote, “The reason they use both Facebook and Instagram is because of two reasons.” Like I said in my critique of the previous essay, I find this kind of mistake to be nit picky. Accordingly, I believe this essay to be fairly well put together based on its organization and information.