March 2021

Today’s writing group proved extremely insightful and informative. We talked about Monday’s zoom, and how to use the “one search” library database. This helped me immensely, because I was still did not truly understand how to use the library data base. I then found a source that I believe will prove very helpful in my essay. Then, as a group, we discussed the purpose of project three, specifically part five of project three. This was the most informative and helpful part of the entire session. My group mates cleared up any confusion I may have had about part five, like what kind of sources we had to use, and how to effectively summarize sources. Overall, the meeting proved very productive.

My research question has been deemed almost acceptable.  The research question is “How has our popularization of pizza affected our responsibility to health?” . It is not fully acceptable because I have not refined the subject of the thesis. To improve this, I will change “our” to “the United States’ “. My new research question, then, is: “How has the United States’ popularization of pizza affected our responsibility to health?” I kept the second “our”,  leaning on the assumption that readers will know that I am addressing Americans. Should I change this?

If it turns out that there is more data on international pizza than national, then I will change the subject once more. I did not interpret my data correctly because I didn’t include a contrasting graph. Including a contrasting graph would have allowed readers to adequately determine the immense investment that the U.S. has on pizza compared to other foods.