Essay 1
Grade:C+
Explanation: I think the essay was good and it explained the prompt provided. I think the student could have gotten a higher score had the grammar been better. It was very hard to read in some areas because i was having a hard time trying to figure out what the author was trying to say. I think the author could have had more evidence and/or sources. They had an example, but it would have been nice to see evidence. Also the example given i feel shifted a little from what the prompt was. The author did try to tie in the similarities, but he could have used a better example. Overall the essay was nice, I understood what he was trying to say, but it was areas the author could have wrote better. I think the score I gave was so high because I feel he tried to execute the prompt to the best of his abilities.
Essay 2
Grade: A
Explanation: I think this student effectively examined and answered the prompt provided. I was wearisome because I did not understand the direction the student was taking, but they seemed to have turned it around. I think not only did the student answer the prompt they also made their essay flow as well. It was understandable and easy to read. I think if the student had talked about the hackers sooner the grade could have been even higher. Overall I have no critiques besides those mentioned above. I think this essay is great and had all of the qualities of an A.