Category: Daily Writes

Based on the feedback I received in peer review, I need to add more personal analysis to balance out the heavy amount of quotes that I have. Also, I could make a few changes to my introduction. I need to add more of how the author argues her point instead of how much she argues her point. Finally, I need to write a conclusion that is strong and supports my claims and affirms the authors.

The biggest challenge of this assignment thus far has been choosing a topic. I really liked the way the author in Stop Stealing from Strippers, the example opinion piece we read to prepare for this assignment, wrote and wanted to find an article that had lots of claims, like her’s did, that I could analyze but also had interesting subject matter. I was opposed to writing about politics, I have been doing a good bit of that recently and wanted to try something new, and I had already written about fashion just last week, which is what my go-to topic usually is. After searching pretty much all weekend, I found the perfect piece. “Why Do We Teach Girls That It’s Cute to be Scared?” by Caroline Paul, is written with lots of claims that can be analyzed multiple ways, it is clear what her claims are, I love the way she writes and her subject matter, feminism, is something that really is important to me. I feel really good about the topic I have chosen and the way my analysis is going so far.

Based on the first paper and my professors comments, on my next paper I will be making a few changes. For my next paper I need to study a little more about MLA formatting and review the formatting on my paper more closely before turning it in. I can not believe I forgot a title! Also, I will work on summarizing less and on analyzing more when it comes to the articles. I think I will end up revising this paper and I look forward to being able to improve it with all the new skills I have learned.

As a part of out Rhetorical Analysis we discussed and learned about ethos, pathos and logos as models or persuasion in writing. Ethos is for the convincing of the reader of the ethics or credibility of the author. Pathos is the emotional appeal to engage the audience and appeal to their emotions. Logos is to appeal to the logic of the audience to get them thinking. These are not only used in writing but are key to a good and engaging rhetorical analysis.

I feel finished with my paper. Two people read and reviewed it at peer review and then following their corrections I had a friend read and review it to get it ready for final submission. I think just to make sure I’m happy with it I will read it again tonight and make some final corrections or additions as needed to make sure it is perfect.

My first draft of my Dior New York Times analysis is full of information. Maybe too much information. I definitely analyzed the articles based on content, but I know that I am lacking in a more personal opinionated analysis. Also, I think that my conclusion for sure needs to be edited and made stronger. However, I think I have a really strong introduction and thesis that I stuck to throughout the paper.

Last semester, I took 12 hours of classes. It was very manageable and they were always finished by noon. This semester, even though I’m only taking one more hour then last, I have had the hardest time adjusting to a new schedule.I do not know why it has been so difficult for me to adjust to being on a new schedule but it has really thrown me off. Instead of being finished with classes by noon, most days I am starting my classes then. On Tuesday and Thursday, days last semester I did not even have class, I am in class all day until five o’clock. I am really trying to get my classwork finished between classes so that I can have time at night to get organized and do the things I want to do. Hopefully by the end of next week I will be well adjusted and that this change will not let me fall behind.