What is hip hop? Everyone wants to be a
part of hip hop or everyone wants to rap. Hip hop
music, culture, style and dance has became so
popular since it was first created because there’s
white rappers and even more groups.
Hip hop is evolving more and more each day. Hip
hop is a culture, style, dance, and music. Hip hop
did begin with the African American race, but it
has evolved to where everyone is a part of it.
Some people think hip hop belongs to African
Americans because they were the first to create
hip hop. Some people also believe that only black
people can rap but they are all wrong. Hip hop
doesn’t belong to any race, and anyone can
rap or dance in hip hop. Not only a black person
can rap or dance because even though they created
it or was raised around that kind of music,
dancing, and culture doesn’t mean that they are
the only ones that can rap or listen and like
that kind of music because anyone can.
There are many and has been many successful
white rappers. Some are Eminem, Yelawolf,
Lil Dicky, G-Eazy, and Macklemore. White
rappers can be as successful as the African
American rappers.
Although anyone can rap, dance, and listen to
hip hop music, the hip hop culture belongs
to African Americans because they were the
people to create hip hop.
Hip hop has changed but has stayed the same
overtime. People then and now are rapping
about money, drugs, and a female in a bad
way or a male in a bad way. It has also stayed
same because there are groups like before.
Some groups from the past were TLC, N.W.A.,
Run-D.M.C., and Beastie Boys. Some groups now
Are A$AP Mob, Rae Sremmurd, OVO, MMG,
and G.O.O.D. Music. Most of the groups are
Very popular and others are trying to work
themselves up. People in most groups aren’t
good rappers and they are African American,
so race has nothing to do with rapping skills.
Even though the hip hop culture belongs to
African Americans, nothing else does because
anyone can rap, dance, and even listen to
hip hop music. That doesn’t belong to anyone.
When it comes to hip hop some people are
protective because that may be their culture
or feel like only the African American race
are only allowed to do those things like rap,
dance, and listen to the music.
No race or gender belongs to hip hop, except
hip hop’s culture which belongs to African
Americans. Anyone can rap, dance, or listen
to hip hop.
explain from the get go what hip hop is, or what makes it different from other styles of music
good use of hyperlink!
maybe change color of font or make bigger, its hard to read when you’re scrolling.
insert comma in “think they can rap (,) but they’re wrong”
change “was” to “were” when talking about them being able to dance just because they were raised around hip hop.
when saying “white rappers can be successful too,” maybe reword it to something less blunt, like “in music culture today, the color of a performers skin does not determine their success in the hip hop industry”
Are you arguing that rap is for African Americans or everyone? your last sentence contradicts itself. You say it belongs to a certain group, but is open for everyone. Specify that rap and hip hop were created and have cultural aspects of african american history, but over time and through the integration of our cultures, whites and other races, as well as females, have began to play a role in the hip hop music world.
on the paragraphs that have just one sentence, i’d add another sentence or group them to another paragraph.
they hyperlinks were very effective.
why should readers care about this? think about who youre talking to and that should help determine the purpose of this article and the message youre trying to send.
maybe add an image?
good job on ordering and hitting all of your points firmly
add in a few adjectives to add emotion and keep the reader interested
great topic, very original and unique
good job!!!!!
(let me know if any of this was unclear)
-Meredith Moore