March 2021

One place I may need to revise my essay would be my transitions in the last couple of body paragraphs before the conclusion.  I feel like I can bring together the body if I had a better way to transition between the paragraphs.  I will working on that soon.

The people who are going to be affected by my predictions would be those of gen z and millennials who smoke and vape. The affects will be both mentally and physically and possibly have an effect of the economy.

I feel like the blind spots of my topic would be the monetary value of the vaping epidemic.  I could add some parts of an article that explain how big e-cigarette companies play a huge role in big tobacco companies. I know that some of these companies are worth billions and can be worth adding for many different reasons.

One way the feedback will help me with my argumentative essay will be to directly address how my sources are connecting to my writing. Also, use specific quotes from my sources to tie into my writing. Always address the sources and make sure they are lining up with my part in the essay.

What I could add in my writing is that Public health agencies are collaborating up to create a new mini-documentary about the teen vaping epidemic and the impacts it has had.  Furthermore, I could add that this epidemic is on the decline as I have seen in many of the news articles on google news.

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The obstacles that I feel as if I have encountered would be finding articles that have been peer-reviewed. After today’s class, it did give me some clarification on where to find them. I think that I have been resourceful in the ways that I am using many different sources to research this topic.

What I learned about teen vaping is that there are many health concerns that come from vaping nicotine at a young immature age. There is a serious concern for the adolescent brain and lungs that can be seriously damaged. There is a gland in the throat that can get very irritated by the vapors and causes the gland to produce an absurd amount of mucus that will reside in the lungs.  I think that I need more information about the argument to make my prediction better.  Finally what I think that I need to learn about my topic is to find a doctor or patients case about the effects of vaping to their body.

I have looked at different health organizations and government websites as my sources.

Other helpful sources may be case studies or something along those lines.

I have yet to find any academic disciplines within my research but will keep an eye out for it.

I need more argument sources.

I am good.  My mom just came into town for a few days which was really nice.  Most of my classes are going pretty well. There are some days I struggle with my math class but I always find a way to persevere.  Also, i have to tell myself to stop worrying so much about my geo class and to lock in and get my stuff done to my best efforts.