Peer review for Makayla Jones
From Jacob lattig
Directions
- Carefully read each of your peer group members’ drafts and make notes as you read.
- Thoroughly answer each of the below questions for the drafts. Do separate reviews for each member.
- Send peer reviews to your group members via email by the time you establish as a group.
- Copy+paste each peer review into one Word doc(x) then upload it to Blackboard (navigate to “submit MPs”) by the due date.
Peer Review Worksheet Writ 101, MP 1: Let’s Literacy! (due Sept. 11)
- How does the writer set the scene (begin to tell the story) to get the reader “hooked”? Cite specific examples. Makayla sets the scene by describing her childhood memories of her kindergarten teacher teaching her the ABCs and 123s.
- What specific context and details does the writer give for the literacy sponsor(s) or literacy activity? Cite specific examples and page numbers. “By “a discourse” a socially accepted association among ways of using language, of thinking, and of acting that can be used to identify oneself as a member of a socially meaningful group or “social network”(Gee, 18).
- How does the writer analyze the ways socioeconomic factors — like race, class status, gender – affect the access to literacy experiences and/or literacy sponsorship? Cite specific examples and page numbers. Makayla talks about how she was put in a great learning environment to be able to understand and us what she was taught.
- What scholars – like Brandt and Gee – does the writer cite? Cite specific examples and page numbers. “Eli Jr. clearly illustrates this understanding of how children perceive and comprehend the sometimes seemingly elusive text of their lives”(Fisherman, 848).
- What could the writer add to make a stronger connection to those scholars and sources? Cite specific passages/page numbers. The writer could make a stronger connection by maybe describing a time where she used the scholars sources in school.(pg1-2)
- Roses: List 3 strong aspects of this draft. Cite specific passages/page numbers. 1. I think the first important aspect of the draft is the beginning where she talks about her kindergarten experience and how she grew from that. “Mrs. Carr, my head start teacher was one of the best. She taught me everything I needed to know when it came to reading and writing. The basics of reading and writing are easy. At school, we would sing songs as in the ABC and 123 song to learn them and write them down. As time went by throughout the semester, we would start to learn how to read words. Reading words would help us get the skills of learning how to read. It was all easy at first until I got older and started reading hard, long AR books.”(pg. 1)
- The writer talks about her first time writing and I think it’s a major part in this draft. “In sixth grade, I started to learn how to write papers. It was really simple because all we had to do was write about what we talked about in the classroom. My teachers would teach me to indent and how to start a paragraph. We would also learn how to use literacy with our writing. Literacy is a form of reading and writing with communication.”(pg. 2)
- I loved how the writer brought up the #1000BlackGirlBooks and described the concept perfect. “I feel like writing can improve your skills if you continue to write. The reason why people write books is because they want an audience to enjoy them. In the video #1000BlackGirlBooks, Marley Diaz talks about how some people are not dedicated to read and write because they do not really have to unless they are in school. She encourages some parents to let their children at least read a book once a day to improve their reading skills. Improving reading skills can also improve your writing skills.”(pg. 2)
- Thorns: List 1 to 3 aspects of this draft the writer might improve, then offer a way for them to improve these aspects. The one aspect of this draft that I think could be fixed is that you should get more in depth with your topics and talk about how it made you feel.