Category: Daily Writes

Btdubs

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Side Note: I don’t even know what I’ve been posting where lately so sorry ’bout that ………

Anywho, the rhetoric triangle helped me a lot. It showed me that although it is a research paper, I don’t have to shy away from any sense of pathos. Some logos are pathos within themselves and that is okay. Also it was encouraging to hear that my intro didn’t suck. So yay me. Boo me because my sources do suck and I actually need to really focus and use one search rather than typing my topic into google. Damn you, sophisticated technology.

Timed Writing

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There is a lot of opinions out about participation trophies. However, opinions don’t help me much. Participation trophies are highly controversial and really depend a lot of parenting style. Thus, I feel a lot of my sources contain too much opinion. I would like to dig deeper and find more legit studies about what giving kids trophies for showing up actually does to them later in their life, as well as what it does at an early age. The era of trophies for breathing is fairly new which makes these elongated studies difficult to find. My sister is a fourth grade teacher, though, and I am going to ask her to record responses from her students when only the “winning” team receives an award.

Rhetorical Analysis Timed Writing

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Rhetorical Analysis

So what? So what if I drive my car to my neighbor’s house instead of walking? So what if I leave the water running when I brush my teeth? So what if I buy make up and food that has palm oil in the ingredients? What difference could my little footprint really have? A lot. New York Times columnist Thomas L. Friedman writes a column on the alarming rate in which our natural recourses and spectacular wild life is decreasing. In the day and age of gasoline guzzlers, unrecycled recyclable waste, and poaching, Friedman points out that humans “will become just another bad biological experiment” (Friedman). The Pulitzer Prize winner, National Book Award recipient and Oxford scholar appeals to pathos and uses juxtaposition to convey to his reader the imperativeness of not waiting a second longer to do something about saving our planet from the only real monsters there are: ourselves.

Friedman uses juxtaposition to convey the state our world is in. He compares the real world to the world of the screen that today’s youth lives in. He strengthens his argument by making comparisons that everyone can relate to such as saying “dumping Amazon words for Amazon.com words”. This hits home with the reader as it makes the reader evaluate priorities: is internet shopping more important than our earth?

In this column, the writer appeals to pathos. The reader’s emotions are tapped into when they consider the actual state of our planet. Through facts that make the reader think and the talk about the children of the world, the reader is forced to see the errors in their own ways. The nonchalant tone Friedman uses when he says “O.K, so you don’t care that your kids may never see an elephant” implies that the attitude of humans have become this unconcerned with the wellbeing of the planet we call home.

 

Things To Do:

  • each paragraph needs claim
  • use transition from claim
  • after claim come in with evidence
  • use transition after evidence
  • strength analysis; what is the effect on the reader
  • increase substance of paragraphs
  • change intro claim to include logos as well
  • transition to each new paragraph
  • citations
  • cry

 

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I hate when all people comment on my stuff is “this is good” “nothing is wrong with it” I DON’T BELIEVE YOU

Anyways, I liked the way Solomon introduced his paper with an outside quote that related to the column.

I think I need to build more ethos for Friedman that is relevant to this particular column.

Also the comments on NYT are super helpful and I am going to use them to continue the paper.

It’s Getting Old

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Honestly?

America needs to grow up. Everything about this is absolutely ridiculous, on both parties. I am so tried of everyone constantly being offended by every single thing. The comment on Facebook was absurd, and while yes, it makes me want to drop kick Samson in the face, there are sooooooo many stupid people in the world who say stupid things. Why don’t we look up racist comments on social media and hold a protest against every single person, black or white, who has ever said anything racist? I am all for standing up against what you believe in, so if students wanted to have a sit in, fine, but I felt their condemnation of Vitter’s original statement was harsh. The way they were talking made it seem like Vitter liked the comment, and shared it on his page. Obviously Vitter in no way supports Samson’s ignorance, he’s the chancellor of a college for goodness sake. Let’s be real, slavery ended 150 years ago, isn’t it time to move on? I believe in history and learning about it and paying our respects to it, but America has gotten to the point where everyone constantly thinks everyone else is out to get them all the time. Stupid remarks that symbolize ignorance and unawareness are made daily. People are going to be stupid and no protest will ever stop that. Protesting and spreading awareness of Samson’s idiotic comment only draws more attention to him and makes him famous, is that what we want?

More Can’t’s in a World of Possibilities

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-Can’t use first person

– First sentence can’t be a question

-Can’t use one syllable words

-Thesis can’t be anywhere besides last sentence in intro

– Can’t use sentence fragments

-Can’t use simple sentences, make it complex

-Cannot use contractions

-Can’t vary from 5 paragraph essay form

 

Oh, and don’t breathe too much either …

“Dream Catchers”

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I think I am going to write on option four. I ruled out number three because I am white and do not romanticize Native Americans and I am not sure I even understand what Corliss means when she says that. Prompt two is a touchy subject for me since my boyfriend is African American and my dad does not approve of our relationship and therefore I don’t want my paper to get too opinionated and focused on my specific situation instead of the United States as a whole. I really like both the first and last prompts. The first however, focuses on quests, which includes my personal quest, but quests imply a gain of self knowledge at the end and I have yet to reach the end of my quest and therefore lack the quest-enlightened self knowledge and would rather write on this prompt at the end of senior year perhaps. The final choice instructs me to write on what it means to be college-educated, and with the passing of my grandmother today I am already starting to realize I am learning a lot more in college than book smarts. I am concerned simply about writing my first real college paper and relating all three elements(Ten Little Indians, Dream Catchers video, and my own person testimony) in a cohesive manner that flows properly.

Drunk Chronicles

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11:32pm. I’m in my bed. My roommate is in bed. With PJ’s on and make up off we were settled in for a a good night’s rest after a day of what seemed like impossible tasks. Her phone rings.

“Hello?”

I can’t hear the other end of the conversation, but I had a pretty good idea who it was.

“Yeah, we’ll be there in a second.”

The infamous late night, drunk call from the square by our two favorites: Avery and Alex.

“They need a ride, you going?”

We jump out of bed, which I mean quite literally since neither of our 5 foot selves can reach the floor while from the bed. PJs off, shoes on, we head out. The CA’s at the front desk give us questioning looks as we exit the building, but we dodge their fire and begin the five minute journey to the square. We arrive at our usual meeting spot, the parking space right in front of Rooster’s and wait for the boys to stumble, literally stumble, into the car. Backing out of the parking spot may be the hardest part as every one feels they have more important places to be than you. We eventually find ourselves on the path to take our friends home. We see flashlights in the distance. We approach men in uniform. They knock on the window.

“License, please”

I pull out my license out and allow him to speculate if it’s valid or not. I’m sure he’s used to fakes. He asked a few questions and allowed me drive away, slowly and carefully of course. The boys were hungry. We pulled up to Cook Out and laughed as the drunken boys tried to spill their orders out. Fed and happy, we drove them to their apartment and watched them attempt to get up the stairs to their second floor oasis.

“Never a dull moment with them, huh?” said Mary Catherine.

“I don’t think drinking is for me.”

One Story, A Million Authors

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In “Flight Patterns”, after 9/11 people had one story of “little, brown people”. All people believed the little brown people were ones to watch out for, even the little brown people themselves. The attacks on the World Trade Center erased every good story ever heard or told about brown people and this one horrific story replaced it, becoming the only story people knew. Adichie talks about how harmful this one sided story can be to our community and world we live in. Africans are perhaps the biggest victim of this “one story” theory, and Adichie knew this and was directly hurt by it, but she found herself judging Mexicans off of the one “illegal immigrant” story that she knew. Likewise, William found himself starring at little brown people on his flight, even though he knew everyone was also starring at him. As much as we hear the saying “don’t judge a book by its cover”, it would much better for us to judge a million books by their covers instead of only reading one.