The most helpful part of today was having a second pair of eyes look at it from an outsiders pov. Sometimes I struggle because I know what I am trying to say but no on else does. I was told to expand the anecdote about how I picked my major and give some more context on why we should care about major choice. It is helpful to have advice on where I should take my intro because that helps me know where I should take the whole paper in general. I also want to add a little bit more of “causes” and “effects” of major choice in my intro as well.