Many researcher have tried to explain why young women living in poverty are more likely to have kids in their teens, and have concluded that growing up with few economic prospects can lead young women to choose teen parenting. The cycle of poverty is a controversial topic in today’s society and have many contributing factors. Focusing mainly on the connection of teen pregnancy and poverty is more controversial because these are two enlightened topics that causes many problems in our growing world. Studies reveal many different factors for this (include factors found in research). . . Impoverished teens, however, do not always feel motivated to work toward future planning because they have a poor sense of self-efficacy, and because of this, they may not see the importance of avoiding pregnancy.
Good Start. Maybe, list the contribution factors you mentioned.
The only thing I noticed was that you need to propose a new focus for your research based off of your findings.
I like your proposal. It is different because I have yet to hear anyone talk about this subject of young, poor teenage girls wanting to have children instead of bettering themselves.
I like how you started it off, making it seem as if you were trying to grasp/ draw readers in.
Very good start! You did a good job at providing strong vidid words to get your topic across. I see that you might need to add an “s” to the end of researcher in the first sentence, and possibly find a synonym for the word controversial when it was used the second time so that you aren’t repeating it back to back.
I did not see the original question, I do see you relating your topic to a cultural myth. You also provide background information.
To build better kairos, you may want to list a compelling statistic about the numbers of pregnant teens (to prove how much of a problem this is in today’s society). I’ve read articles recently that suggest that teen pregnancy rates are decreasing, but that may not be the case in impoverished communities.
Love the focus, but you may also want to address how your research helped you narrow your focus. And in your working thesis, make the causal relationship clearer. Example: Because of a lack of motivation and self-esteem, many teens in poverty are unable to understand the full consequences of having a baby too young. OR My research suggests that many teen pregnancies within impoverished communities are caused by a lack of motivation and self-esteem.
This proposal argument is very well written. I would go back and pull specific events from today that shows where poverty teens do not need to have an offspring. You may want to provide examples of what would happen and what may not happen such as health and environment wise. You can go back and tell how your research led you to your question or how it is supporting your topic. Great usage of diction, too.
This proposal is very well put together. The only thing that I can see bad is that you didn’t insert some of the information to strengthen your proposal. Overall, everything looks good to me!
The only thing that I would suggest is putting in a statistic for teen pregnancies to build kairos.
I agree with jsdavis3, who said maybe something along the lines of maybe giving some specifics involved with your topic to boost the intelligence level of this proposal. As of right now, I feel as though I just read someones attempt at an empty conclusion of a research paper, where, because they feel that they’re not supposed to give as many facts as they have been in the actual whole of the paper. It possesses a sense of monotony and I don’t feel like this topic or your efforts should come across this way; you’ve worked hard! Now show us all you’ve got in just a quick taste; flash us with the goods and have us coming back for more for the rest of the time you’ve got our attention!
This is a good proposal. It states the issues of teen pregnancy and women poverty; however I did not see the myth related to the topic nor the reason why it is important today.