Intro to Argumentative Research Paper revision
Clayton revised my introduction. He said it was very good and he liked that I started with a fact that really caught the reader’s eye, but I could use more back up to my claim and I could make my claim a little more clear.
Original:
“Excessive drinking is responsible for more than 4,300 deaths among underage youth each year, and cost the U.S. $24 billion in economic costs in 2010. Although drinking by persons under the age of 21 is illegal, people aged 12 to 20 years drink 11% of all alcohol consumed in the United States. More than 90% of this alcohol is consumed in the form of binge drinks” (CDC). Many underage drinkers consume alcohol illegally because it provides a rush because they know they are not allowed to. For many rebellious teens, they live for the sensation of breaking the law because of the excitement it gives them. Because underage drinkers are not allowed to drink socially, when they are given the opportunity they are more likely to get alcohol poisoning from drinking too much in one time period.
Revised:
“Excessive drinking is responsible for more than 4,300 deaths among underage youth each year, and cost the U.S. $24 billion in economic costs in 2010. Although drinking by persons under the age of 21 is illegal, people aged 12 to 20 years drink 11% of all alcohol consumed in the United States. More than 90% of this alcohol is consumed in the form of binge drinks” (CDC). Underage drinking would decrease tremendously if the legal drinking age in America were lowered to 18 years old. Many underage drinkers consume alcohol illegally because it provides a rush or sensation of knowing they are not allowed. Lowering the legal age would take away the thrill of getting drunk because they are not breaking the law in order to do so, and eventually lower the percentage of alcohol consumers. For many rebellious teens, they live for the sensation of breaking the law because of the excitement it gives them. Because underage drinkers are not allowed to drink socially, when they are given the opportunity they are more likely to get alcohol poisoning from drinking too much in one time period.
Timed Writing- Argumentative Sources 10/19/16
I was still trying to figure out what I wanted to write about
Daily Write 10/12/16 Research Topic
I think I would like to write about abortion and my opinion on whether it is right or wrong. I feel like I will have a lot to write about because I know both sides of this argument very well and I can make a lot of good points in my argument.
Unit Reflection Unit 2 10/10/16
Unit 2 has helped me understand rhetorical analysis and the different ways to appeal to audiences. I did not really realize how much pictures appeal to emotions and how much writers use pathos in their columns to catch their audiences’ eyes. I have never thought of satire like I did when we learned about it. I thought comedians were just trying to be funny, but some comedians use satire and sarcasm to make their appoints, usually about politics, and help the audience view the subject in a different way.
Weekly Write 10/7/16 Check yourself
I feel like academically I am trying my best and right now that is all that I can do. I feel like I have done really well with time management, making sure I have everything done, and prioritizing between having fun and my school work. I still slightly struggle with prioritizing my classes and putting a specific class before others, but it has gotten a lot better. I really like how I have managed my time so far.
Timed Writing 10/5/16
Is Anne Frank Considered a Modern Day Syrian Girl?
Since the outbreak of the civil war in March 2011, an estimated 11 million Syrians have fled their homes in fear. Now, in the sixth year of war, 13.5 million refugees are in need of humanitarian assistance within the country. In Nicholas Kristof’s New York Times column “Anne Frank Today is a Syrian Girl”, Kristof states that the Syrian refugees today are being treated remarkably similar to the way the jews were treated during the Holocaust in the 1930’s and 40’s. Nicholas Kristof; Harvard graduate, Pulitzer Prize winner, and New York Times Op-Ed writer uses the many rhetorical strategies in order to justify to his audience how similar Americans treated european refugees during World War II and how Americans treat Syrian refugees now. Kristof uses multiple rhetorical devices to prove the need for Americans to acknowledge the severity of the Syrian crisis by comparing Syrian refugees to Holocaust victims. Nicholas Kristof comparing these two events is very effective because the audience understands the severity of the Holocaust when they may not fully understand how severe the Syrian crisis really is.
Nicholas Kristof uses many different rhetorical devices throughout this column. One of the main devices he uses is emotional appeal in order to engage his audience. Using emotions in writings hooks the readers and captivates their interest. Kristof connects a lot of emotions through pictures of Syrian refugees in need. The picture Kristof uses in “Anne Frank Today is a Syrian Girl” is a picture of Anne Frank as a child and a crying Syrian girl who is covered in dirt and blood from the airstrikes in Aleppo, Syria. Comparing these two little girls is how Kristof compares the European and Syrian refugees through emotion. Kristof also relates to emotions when he describes what is happening in Syria today in order to inform readers of how much the refugees are in need. Kristof says, “President Obama’s reluctance to do more to try to end the slaughter in Syria casts a shadow on his legacy…” (Kristof). Because the use of the word “slaughter” has such a negative connotation and visual image, it immensely affects the audience through emotion and truly gives them a descriptive image of the damage in Syria.
Reading Response Columnist’s Social Media vs. Columns 9/28/16
The Columnist I chose to explore was Nicholas Kristof. He mostly writes about politics the Syrian crisis. In his columns have some biased comments towards Hillary Clinton, especially at the moment because of the debate. I am kind of surprised at his social media pages. I expected his Twitter account to be a little more normal and about his life more than about politics, but it is just as political as his columns. His social media is even more opinionated and biased than his articles. His Facebook page has even more political topics than his twitter. All of his pages are public. You can definitely see what he believes in because of how opinionated he is on his social media. Kristof’s Facebook and Twitter are full of Trump slander and some jokes about Trump along with Clinton supporting posts. He uses pathos about the Syrian topics and logos and ethos on posts about his support for Clinton.
Daily Write 9/26/16 Lyceum Protest
It is an absolute shame that people still act and talk like this about racial issues even in 2016. How can a person be so violent yet so nonchalant about such a cruel statement. It is especially embarrassing that it was an Ole Miss student who said such an awful thing towards another race. I am so happy that so many people stood up so quickly and would not be discriminated against. That so many students automatically stood up for what they believe in no matter the consequences. Some people’s views of race have not changed, but the people’s voices definitely have. I’m very happy people do not just let things slide so easily now and most people will not let something wrong continue to occur without standing up for their beliefs.
Reading Response Kristof Columns 9/25/16
All of Nicholas Kristof’s writing that I have read about so far has been about the refugees in Syria. He is very biased towards letting the Syrian Refugees into the United States for help and getting them visas. He writes that many people believe that any refugees the United States of America lets in could be Syrian spies or terrorists. In many of his columns, he compares the Syrian refugees today to Jewish people who were discriminated against in Germany in the 1930’s and 40’s. Kristof has many good points and uses logos in many of his writings because it is true that in the 30’s and 40’s Americans did not want to let Jews into the country because they thought they could be Nazi spies, just like they think the Syrian refugees could also be terrorists or spies for ISIS. He also uses pathos in some of his columns when he talks about the war in Syria. In “Anne Frank Today is a Syrian Girl”, Kristof compares Anne Frank to a Syrian little girl. He writes about Anne Frank’s family and how they tried to escape Germany, but could not get into the United States. Kristof says, “Fears of terrorism have left Muslim refugees toxic in the West, and almost no one wants them any more than anyone wanted a German-Dutch teenager named Anne” (Kristof). Kristof also uses a lot of persuasion in his writing because he is very biased and one sided about his views on politics. Especially for the Syrian refugees.
Reading Response “How Omran Daqneesh, 5, Became a Symbol of Aleppo’s Suffering.” 9/21/16
-Purpose is to inform readers of what happened to Omran Daqneesh and what made him so popular and a symbol of the tragedy everyday in Aleppo, Syria.
-to emotionally effect readers in order to make a point about what is happening in Syria
-to show that this happens everyday
-he uses pathos to effect the reader
-he uses the video and the pictures of Omran and quotes from witnesses, doctors, and medics.
-he uses some rhetorical devices like syntax (rhetorical questions and juxtaposition)
-the pictures make it extremely emotional and effective
-it is bias towards having more involvement in Syria and helping them
-the effect is extremely powerful and sad, but very true and factual
-most effective strategy is the pictures and using pathos to speak to the reader